Peliminary Exercise, Written Feedback

Good points about my work

Camera shots were diverse. POV, high angles, etc. Which had helped represent the main character quite well. The POV shot built up the atmosphere and the match on action, of the main character worked really well, it shows how the two characters were introduced face to face. Overall, the diverse shots shows the theme, and ephasies what was happening in the plot.
The narrative was very clear. Shani had said that it was unique, as helikes the way I used a girl which no-one likes in my production, as the main character.
The shots of the girls feet at the beginning created suspense within the audience. As they didn't know who it was, they only knew that it was a girl. This added to the audiences reaction and the narrative. Using alot of close-ups helped, as it showed the girls facial expressions, which the audience could relate to.
What was really liked was my choice of music. Using 'Pink' it showed that the narrative was based on girls, and related not only to the narrative but also the characters.
The text at the beginning and end made my production look like an actual film. And showed that i'm the only who had made that particular production. (edited by me).
It could easily be told that alot of planning went into it, from the various shots and the overall storyline. This could also be told, by the other girls which were in my production, showing that I had to take time out to round up the girls and tell thme their positions and their roles.


Bad Points about my work

There were some shakey moments when using the camera, which could have been avoided.
A planning when the girl walks past the crowd, then when the shot changes to her answering her phone, the crowd jus disappears.
The main bad point about my work was the sound mixing. I hadn't mixed the sound very well at the beginning with the crowd talking and the background music. They clashed with each other.
My production didn't require much research, and was quite simple.

Targets which i need to improve on.

My sound mixing.
The characters which I choose in the clip.